Travistalks: what do you think of my page

Sunday, March 9, 2008

trying to get feedback on what i can do to improve my page what you like,what you dont like let me know.

Anonymous said...: Use correct grammar, spelling, and punctuation. Not doing so makes you appear uneducated and unintelligent, and no one wants to read analysis by someone with those qualities. Not trying to be mean, but e.g. your first sentence in the 3.9 post:

"A guy that not alot of people talk about with the hope that Francise comes back to form and Livian Hernandez can get some people out has been the emergence of Scott Baker to Ace status."

"alot" should be "a lot," "Francise" should be "Francisco" or "Franchise," "Livian" is "Livan," people don't generally "emerge to" a status (they "emerge as an ace" instead of "emerge to an ace"), and "Ace" should not be capitalized. The whole sentence is poorly constructed in general and hard to parse in addition to these problems.

None of these mistakes are a problem on their own, but taken together they make your writing seem not particularly worth reading. Just my two cents.; March 10, 2008 at 10:42 AM

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